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desire-billy.livejournal.com posting in monaboyd Jul. 2nd, 2004 08:03 pm)Title: Reading Between The Lines
Author: desire_billy
Pairing: Dom/Billy
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I lie often.
Summary: No one is to blame that they are not together.
A/N: Italics indicate lyrics. Lyrics belong to Howard Jones.
The line And you want her and she wants you was changed by me to fit this fic. Forgive me.
You can look at the menu but you just can't eat
Billy is close to Dom.
You can feel the cushions but you can't have a seat
They laugh, cry and share.
You can dip your foot in the pool but you can't have a swim
Dom is gay.
You can feel the punishment but you can't commit the sin
Billy is straight.
And you want him and he wants you
They are in love.
We want everyone
Billy dates Ali. Dom dates Elijah.
And you want him and he wants you
Dom waits for Billy. Billy wishes he could change things.
No one, no one, no one ever is to blame
Billy is not gay. Dom is not straight.
You can build a mansion but you just can't live in it
They stand arm in arm at premiers. They look into each other's eyes.
You're the fastest runner but you're not allowed to win
When in a crowded room they can only see each other.
Some break the rules
Billy is there for Dom when Elijah breaks up with him.
And live to count the cost
Billy holds Dom all night and tells him he will never be alone.
The insecurity is the thing that won't get lost
Billy goes back to Scotland the very next day. Dom tells him he's fine.
And you want him and he wants you
Billy knows Dom is lying, but leaves before he can cause either anymore pain.
We want everyone
Dom eventually takes Elijah back only to be save himself from being alone.
And you want him and he wants you
Billy calls Dom, and tells him again he will never be alone, ever.
No one, no one, no one ever is to blame
Dom breaks up with Elijah realizing he was beginning to settle.
You can see the summit but you can't reach it
Dom visits Billy in Scotland. Ali is away that week.
It's the last piece of the puzzle but you just can't make it fit
They make love the night before Dom leaves. In the morning, Billy says he sorry.
Doctor says you're cured but you still feel the pain
Dom and Billy go months before talking to each other again.
Aspirations in the clouds but your hopes go down the drain
When they do finally talk, Billy tells Dom Ali's pregnant.
And you want him and he wants you
Dom tells Billy he will never be alone. Billy tells Dom he knows.
We want everyone
Billy marries Ali in a small ceremony. Dom attends arm in arm with Elijah.
And you want him and he wants you
During the reception, Billy gives Dom a small box. Inside is a gold band.
No one, no one, no one ever is to blame
The words - Love YOU Dom - are inscribed inside the band.
No one ever is to blame
Dom still wears the ring, after all these years.
No one ever is to blame
Dom still waits for Billy.
Author: desire_billy
Pairing: Dom/Billy
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I lie often.
Summary: No one is to blame that they are not together.
A/N: Italics indicate lyrics. Lyrics belong to Howard Jones.
The line And you want her and she wants you was changed by me to fit this fic. Forgive me.
You can look at the menu but you just can't eat
Billy is close to Dom.
You can feel the cushions but you can't have a seat
They laugh, cry and share.
You can dip your foot in the pool but you can't have a swim
Dom is gay.
You can feel the punishment but you can't commit the sin
Billy is straight.
And you want him and he wants you
They are in love.
We want everyone
Billy dates Ali. Dom dates Elijah.
And you want him and he wants you
Dom waits for Billy. Billy wishes he could change things.
No one, no one, no one ever is to blame
Billy is not gay. Dom is not straight.
You can build a mansion but you just can't live in it
They stand arm in arm at premiers. They look into each other's eyes.
You're the fastest runner but you're not allowed to win
When in a crowded room they can only see each other.
Some break the rules
Billy is there for Dom when Elijah breaks up with him.
And live to count the cost
Billy holds Dom all night and tells him he will never be alone.
The insecurity is the thing that won't get lost
Billy goes back to Scotland the very next day. Dom tells him he's fine.
And you want him and he wants you
Billy knows Dom is lying, but leaves before he can cause either anymore pain.
We want everyone
Dom eventually takes Elijah back only to be save himself from being alone.
And you want him and he wants you
Billy calls Dom, and tells him again he will never be alone, ever.
No one, no one, no one ever is to blame
Dom breaks up with Elijah realizing he was beginning to settle.
You can see the summit but you can't reach it
Dom visits Billy in Scotland. Ali is away that week.
It's the last piece of the puzzle but you just can't make it fit
They make love the night before Dom leaves. In the morning, Billy says he sorry.
Doctor says you're cured but you still feel the pain
Dom and Billy go months before talking to each other again.
Aspirations in the clouds but your hopes go down the drain
When they do finally talk, Billy tells Dom Ali's pregnant.
And you want him and he wants you
Dom tells Billy he will never be alone. Billy tells Dom he knows.
We want everyone
Billy marries Ali in a small ceremony. Dom attends arm in arm with Elijah.
And you want him and he wants you
During the reception, Billy gives Dom a small box. Inside is a gold band.
No one, no one, no one ever is to blame
The words - Love YOU Dom - are inscribed inside the band.
No one ever is to blame
Dom still wears the ring, after all these years.
No one ever is to blame
Dom still waits for Billy.
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*raises hand quietly, hesitantly*
Um. Question, here. Is this a fic?
Honestly, I'm just plain not sure.
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The part about the gold band. Beautiful. It really tugged at my heart. I really loved that. It reminds me how bittersweet love can be.
*hugs*
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thanks for sharing :)
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You did a lovely job with this.
Erin
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Absolutely wonderful ... the way you wrote first the song line then your line, not giving away too much and leaving a little to our own imaginations ... truly reading between the lines.
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cheers
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I see in the above comments th
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Ugh, sorry, wrong key.
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Dom still waits for Billy.
wahhh.
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I really like this, you already know that. It's special. Not like every other fic.... <3
And I'm so proud of you; you know why. You really deserve all the nice comments after all the shit that's been going on.
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"You can dip your foot in the pool but you can't have a swim
Dom is gay."
There doesn't seem to be any connection whatsoever here.
Also, the repressed-man-kidding-himself thing is a rather overdone cliche, and nothing new is really added to that here.
And I can't really make head not tail of this line: "Dom breaks up with Elijah realizing he was beginning to settle." It reads as if half the sentence has been left off the end. Your sentences are terribly simplistic, for example "Dom tells Billy he will never be alone. Billy tells Dom he knows."
You have a few punctuation problems- "The words - Love YOU Dom - are inscribed inside the band." is not how that sentence should be punctuated.
You need to get a really, really good and ruthless beta, think more about your plots and characterisation, because in all your fics, they act like two dimensional cliches, or hormonal teenage girls.
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Frankly I'm tired of having to defend this fic. If I had not received so many comments on it I would just delete the whole thing. You didn't get it, didn't like it so fine.
And I think it's rather rude of you to comment like this. You cut ALL of my fics when there is no way you could have read them all my LJ is Friends Only because of people who comment like you.
If you don't like something just move on. Why try to be hurt? But like I said whatever.
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I got shivers, man. Not only from the sad-achy sentement of the story, but about how good of a writer u really are! This fic is something i've never seen b4 and also v. different from ne fic i have read ever! it's creative and unique and very heart-melting!
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