Premiere Sex 1/1 NC-17

[robingurl.livejournal.com]

Title: Premiere Sex
By: Robin Gurl
Rating: NC-17
Warning: PWP, Bathroom Sex (some people are weird about certain things)
Notes: Takes place at the premiere where Billy wears his black kilt (I think Paris, right?) I am aware that this has been posted before but now it's complete.
Summary: It's just been to long, and well Billy's wearing his kilt again *smirks* You know Dom
Pairing: Monaboyd, Orlijah Implied
Disclaimer: None of this ever happened. If it did can I get it on video?! LOL!
Feedback: Yes please! (more on content than errors, I have a beta now! ^^)
Cross-Posted: engscotsluv monaboyd robingurl



"Dommie...?" Billy whispered running a hand over Dom's jeans. "It's been to long.."

"Billy, we can't do it here. It's a premiere.." Dom wasn't normally one to follow the rules but God, it was PREMIERE...you just didn't do stuff like that at a premiere..no matter how hot your boy friend looks in his black kilt.

"So, whose gonna give a fuck? We go in the bathroom, no one will see us!!" Billy batted his green eyes playfully then ran a hand up Dom's spine. "Please?"

Dom sighed frustrated, why did Billy have to be so Pippinish Cute when he wanted to have sex? It just wasn't fair. Billy grinned and kissed Dom's cheek, "Thank you!!"

Silently Dom replied with a you're welcome then allowed his love to yank him through the crowds. If they got caught, they were going to die.

*~*

"Off..Off.." Billy commanded as they squished into the handicap bathroom stall. He himself had already removed everything but his kilt. Which he knew that Dom liked to personally remove after he was hard enough...to Dom's standards of course. It had been exactly 1 week since they'd had a really good shag and well, he wanted one now.

Dom obeyed quickly now drooling after getting aroused by Billy's feathery touches all evening. He thought at first that Billy was just randomly touching his privates by accident until when in the back of the huge press room Billy cupped a feel. It had taken all of his wheel power not to melt on the floor and climax right there. When he looked to Billy he saw that the Scot was still wearing the black kilt.

The Kilt.

That's what started all of this. With nothing under the kilt (or that's what Billy had told him) it aroused him to no ends to think of Billy's naked erection just waiting to be stroked and licked. That with one stray hand he could feel what Billy kept hidden under there. "Mmmmm..." Dom pushed Billy up against the brick wall taking over as usual. Billy allowed him to as usual. Dom was always in charge when it came to sex. It was just given.

Leaning down he kissed Billy's lips gently not passionately and pulled away one hand reaching under the plaid fabric and feeling the treasure that was hidden. "No, not just yet..." Billy whimpered and gripped onto Dom's arms to keep himself up right. Dom's hands came out from under the kilt and pinched both of his nipples. Billy hissed in pleasure his hips bucking into Dom.

"D..Do...Dommie.." Came the Scottish whisper of pleasure. It emitted from the soft pink lips that opened and closed with every labored gasp that came out of Billy's lungs. "Yes, Yes, Love..right there...yes,..Ooo...my Merry..."

Dom smiled running a hand through Billy's hair kissing Billy gently again then pulling away. Billy wanted long and hard kisses. He wanted to feel Dom's tongue as it explored it's new home in Billy's mouth. He wanted to taste Dom.

"Let's try now.." Once again Dom cupped a feel this time smiling and licking his lips. "I think it's done." He squeezed the hardened length smirking as Billy collasped agaisnt him. "Do you want me Billy? Do you want me inside of you?"

"I do, Dom. I do." Billy replied dazedly as Dom's feathery touches continued on his hardened member. "Lord, Dom. Just Do it!!"

Dom yanked his jeans off freeing his hardened penis. It was obvious that Dom was fulled aroused and ready for play. Billy let out another whimper as Dom inserted himself. "God Damn it Billy. I swear you get fucking tighter every time we do this." Dom gasped out gripping on to Billy's shoulders.

"ooo...ugh.." Billy blinked tears out of his eyes and bit down hard on Dom's shoulder. "It...it's only when we do it standing up Dumb Ass...oOOOwww..."

"I'm hurting you?" Dom stopped supporting Billy who was still pressed against the wall. "Billy? You're crying. I need to stop!" Dom loved to have sex with Billy in fact it's what he lived for, but he also knew that Billy was delicate...the most delicate man on earth...and to see Billy hurt, well he just couldn't it.

"No..Don't...keep going. The pain will go away in a while." Sweat ran down Billy's face and he kissed Dom pulling the Brit to him. Once again Dom started to thrust and Billy moaned feeling what he'd been wanting to feel for 7 fucking days. "Yes! Yes! Yes! DOM! DOM! DOM!"

In reply to Billy's cries of pleasure Dom continued to buck his hips and thrust harder shouting Billy's name as well. "BILLY!! BILLY!! BILLY!!"

"I Love You, Billy, I do." Dom reached down and kissed Billy his tongue entering it's home. The kiss lasted 2 minutes and then Dom climaxed inside Billy. Billy grunted as he climaxed as well...all over Dom's stomach. Pulling out Dom caught Billy as his lover started to fall to his knees.

Panting they laid in a sweaty heap trying to catch their breath. Billy rolled over on top of his lover. "You know, we really got to stop doing this at a premiere. We're going to get caught one of these days." Dom just grinned catching Billy's jaw into another kiss.

Comments

[shelley6441.livejournal.com]

Mmm, Billy in a kilt is indeed HOT! And I hear from reliable sources that no proper Scotsman would be caught wearing anything under his kilt besides his shirt tails...

[robingurl.livejournal.com]

lol *makes note of that and sticks it in her monaboyd folder* LOL. o.o ty! :D glad you liked it!

[hyacinth-sky747.livejournal.com]

A couple of things you may want to watch out for:

To, too, two. Make sure you're using these correctly. It throws the reader out of the experience if they have to pause and figure out which one you actually mean.

Its vs. it's. Dom reached down and kissed Billy his tongue entering it's home. That reads as: Dom reached down and kissed Billy his tongue entering it is home.

Commas. I think you mean: Dom reached down and kissed Billy, his tongue entering its home.

I know it's fussy but I, as a reader, would be able to enjoy the content more if I wasn't stumbling over frequent errors.

[robingurl.livejournal.com]

TY. I have a beta now so maybe these mistakes can be avoided. I almost hate to ask but aside from the errors was the smex ok? o.O;

[hyacinth-sky747.livejournal.com]

I can't tell. It reads as juvenile to me the way it's presented.

For example:

The kiss lasted 2 minutes

"Two" should be spelled out there. Reading the digit 2 makes me feel like I'm reading a little girl's diary. So, no, the sex didn't do anything for me.

I'm also thrown off by characters being referred to by their nationality as in:

"D..Do...Dommie.." Came the Scottish whisper of pleasure.

It's unnatural, and throws me out of the story.

I think you have the beginnings of a good writer. You have passion and the will to improve. Your writing seems, in my opinion to lack maturity. God knows I'm not the best writer in the world but if you'd like further advice from me feel free to email me at hyacinth_sky747@hotmail.

Best of luck in your future endeavors. And keep writing. That's how we all get better.

[cordeilla33.livejournal.com]

I liked it! ;P

*Not to step on anyone't toes, but I didn't/don't mind you using nationalities for some of the story to represents the guys...you know who's who when reading them. (Scotish and British)

Ta!